My Poem - Are You Real?(non-political)

[ReD_ReBeL]

You play on my mind like a vivid hallucination
Transparent
yet so real

I ask,
Are you real?
But I never get an answer.

You’re just there.
Warm.
Pleasant.
Cold
and
Chilling.

You’re a new-age romantic.
yet I don’t know who you are.
or even what you are.

You’re like a novel I can’t understand.
A stanza I can’t relate to.

Yet you pull me too you.
Like a magnetic force.
and I don’t want to resist.

I want to embrace you,
Put a face to my feeling,
Open my arms for you.
Yet when I open up,
You disappear.
…Are you real?

[ReD_ReBeL]

If you thinks its shit,say so. Contructive criticism is a good thing.

[Raúl Duke]

I think it's nice...but

I'm not so much of a poetry critic since I'm no good in poetry.

Also, for constructive criticism:
You are using figurative language (use of similes, metaphor,etc.), which is a plus (than again...can poetry be made without figuritve language?)

[luxemburg89]

I'm gonna be honest - it doesn't appeal to me. I don't like one word - lines and I feel that interupts the meter, HOWEVER, the last few sanzas have some excellent lines. I'm more of an ottava/terza rima person but you seem to be very good at your style, if that makes sense.

thanks for posting it, Lux

[Rage Against Right]

I am a fan of free form poetry and i myself have written in this style. The content is personal and has been dealt with well using free form opposed to sonnet or traditional methods this gives an ambiguity and floating atmosphere. This sometimes led to interupted rythmes which kind of halted the flow of the poem.

I like your use of language especially similes and metaphors
" You’re like a novel I can’t understand.
A stanza I can’t relate to."
I think that line is very effective
A good effort
RAR