I want you to help me with my latest graphic

[Sugar Hill Kevis]

OK guys, firstly if you'd be so kind as to click the thumbnail below

[img]http://img162.imageshack.us/img162/3967/juvenilerestistancecopywq4.th.jpg' alt='' width='150' height='162' class='attach' /> (http://img162.imageshack.us/my.php?image=juvenilerestistancecopywq4.jpg)

And now, I'd like to hear some feedback on how you think it could be improved... For one reason or another, I'm not really happy with it at the moment

Any suggestions?

EDIT: for final piece see: http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/52044345/

[Knight of Cydonia]

do you still have the original pic? i think it would be much better if you make it black and white vectorized (you know what i mean?)....and make it like the "sub-comandante Marcos" that you've made and show it here.

well...that's my suggestion for now... :)

[Red October]

this looks great. and it would look totally badass as a multi-layered stencil.

[OneBrickOneVoice]

maybe complete the body?? i don't know. Looks pretty sweet like it is. Very artistic

[Idola Mentis]

Something's skewed or missing. Try redistributing or adding planes and mass in different places, see if you find a config you like. Human bodies create some standard expectations; here's one cut off by a gun; you'd expect to see a lower body, at least as much body as you see of the woman, but there's nothing there, so the eye interprets the gun as part of the body, not as gun.

You've got a good triangle started, going woman, soldier's head, soldier's hand. It's nicely off balance with the soldier falling, except for the missing body. If you add body, keep it along the weapon/woman's arm line to keep him off balance. But the eye is led off into nothing from the hand, and the woman's head/body is a bit ambiguous in regard to where it fits in the triangle. Not sure how I'd connect them without ruining the off balance effect, though.

[Black Dagger]

Thin the stroke a bit? And the hand looks really off, very un-human if you know what i mean (the thick stroke doesnt help in that regard) - is it possible to re-do the hand? Maybe add more layers to it, or at least cut it manually to a shape more natural-looking for a human hand.

[Sugar Hill Kevis]

the final piece can be seen here: http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/52044345/

thanks for the feedback, I've altered the hand a little bit and added some wankery around the sides...

I tried adding in the body but it threw off the whole balance of the piece... I hope in the way which I've portrayed it in the 'finished' version helps a little bit...

[Black Dagger]

The looks much better; also well done on hiding the fact that there's nothing below the torso... not sure about the new colour scheme though :P

[atlas]

his nose is cut off by the outline, and the arm furthest from the viewer looks like its missing it's bones

[chitown_brotha]

nice work kevis...looks tight,and i think the only plus point would be if you would make the girl outstand more...or the soldier.but i like the idea and the work tho...props