Chapter One - Please Review

[RevolutionaryMarxist]

This is the Introduction and 1st Chapter to a Small Book I'm writing showing the superiority of Idealism over Materialism - I would appreciate comments and suggestions on this draft,

The Other Chapters are still in the works.

(15 Pages Single Spaced)

Note: The Style is partially influenced by Nietzsche's style of writing, for I found Nietzsche's prose very well written and interesting so I incorperated some elements of it into my own writing.

some parts I believe I might be sounding a bit nasty or unorganized so I would like some reasoned commentary.

[RevolutionaryMarxist]

Ok Note: From some reviewers so far, the introduction and preface makes me sound like "I'm wacko" so perhaps focus more on the Chapter One itself, even though I already made a few edits.

Here's an updated version to look at;

[Amusing Scrotum]

Moved to Literature & Films -- I think it is probably more suited to that forum.

[ComradeOm]

Well its certainly very colourful prose.

On the introduction - you're brief history lesson was horribly inaccurate. Obviously it’s a result of compressing human history into two pages but some of the simplifications are still painfully inaccurate. For example, only the most primitive of class societies were ruled absolutely by one man… it was certainly not something that lasted five thousand years. By the same token revolution is as old as history – not something that people invented when they got tired of kings.

There was however one major point caused confusion throughout the first chapter and that is your very definitions of idealism and materialism.

The primary point at the start of the first chapter seems to lay much of human suffering on "the idealists"? You claim that it was idealism itself that caused "the poverty and disease" of medieval times and religion in particular gets a battering. This is all well and good but you're really missing the point – idealism and materialism are merely ways of looking at and analysing the world. That's all.

As materialists we can look at history and note the material causes behind events and societies. We renounce the concept that it is ideals that shape society… both today and throughout human existence. There has never been a "tyrannical history" of idealism because, while idealists may have risen to power in the past, all men are governed by material interests. The wars of the past that left "infinite trail(s) of dead corpses" were not fought over ideals, however much the priests may have endorsed them, but over land, gold and trade.

[RevolutionaryMarxist]

yes, I was mainly focusing on the prose, I guess I shall have to fix the main concepts a bit, thanks :)