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which doctor
16th January 2006, 03:46
I had to write this essay for religion class. I started out okay then I got really into it in the last paragraph. Don't tell me that it's horribly written, because I already know that. Read and enjoy.



Our government does not care what happens to the troops they send out to fight their wars. They knowingly use dangerous ammunitions that harm our troops and harm the innocent civilians in Iraq. They contaminate other countries for years to come with deadly radioactive material. They use them because they get the job done, the job of making innocent Iraqis and our own troops sick.
Depleted Uranium is used in armor piercing rounds. It is the byproduct of the process which creates enriched uranium, which is used to create nuclear power. DU(depleted uranium) is a radioactive material that has been used extensively throughout the world including both Iraq wars. The use of it affects the contaminated area for many years after its use.
DU can get into a persons body in several different ways. DU particles can be carried by the wind many miles away where they can be breathed in. It can contaminate the food and water supply where it can be ingested. If DU shrapnel hits you then particles can become embedded in your body where they can directly enter your bloodstream. It can affect a water source for several years after the weapons were used.
There are many serious conditions which can result from contact with DU. One of the main conditions is called Gulf War Syndrome. Symptoms include damage to the kidneys, cancer, and birth defects in the children of veterans. Many deaths of veterans have been attributed to Gulf War Syndrome and DU contamination.
Even though the use of DU on the battlefield is not only dangerous, but also against the Geneva Conventions the US government refuses to do anything about it. They even have covered up reports that have highlighted the dangers of DU. This shows how they don't care who is affected by the DU as long as it isn't the politicians who authorize its use.
Often times people have done bad things, but attempted to justify them by saying their ultimate goal was good. People cannot use evil, and then justify it by doing good. They are creating evil, the same evil that they are often fighting. The same political corruptness that made them go to war in the first place. The same killing of innocent civilians that made them go to war in the first place. Often times the “good” they are trying to obtain is tainted with evil itself. Look at Iraq for example. Many people think the country is worse off than it was before the invasion. Now Iraq has a government that will make sure to serve US interests, no matter what they are. I don't think that it's a matter whether the politicians are thinking or not. I think it's a matter of whether the politicians care or not. As you can see, the politicians do not care about anyone but themselves. Most of them live their entire lives trying to better their own life, much like most of humanity. We need to change our lives, and start trying to concentrate on the well being of others instead of ourselves.

Delirium
16th January 2006, 03:50
It just needs some more structure and it would be fine.

which doctor
16th January 2006, 04:00
I lost all of my original information and I wrote it in about 1 hour, so please bear with me. I usually do better if I have time to write an outline and such.

Scars
16th January 2006, 04:25
You should have talked about the birth defects caused by DU ammunition, as well as emphasised the fact that the government is knowingly using ammunition that is dangerous to everyone (civilian and military of both sides) solely because it is more effective than normal ammunition, showing that they don't care about the people that are caught up in the war. Instead they only care about the greater goals of the war (which are disputible, I would say it has more to do with geopolitics than oil) and will do whatever is necessary to achive said goals.

And at 513 words strikes me more as a medium sized paragraph, as opposed to an essay.

redstar2000
16th January 2006, 13:35
Originally posted by Fist of Blood
I had to write this essay for religion class.

What's depleted uranium got to do with religion?

What you need to do is write essays attacking superstition.

For example, the anti-Chavez campaign of the Catholic Church in Venezuela.

Don't let those bastards "off the hook".

Give them hell! :angry:

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Scars
16th January 2006, 15:25
Originally posted by [email protected] 16 2006, 01:51 PM
Give them hell! :angry:

Damn that's ironic.

Anyway, looking at it I'd say the essay had somthing to do with teh relationship between morality and power- but I could be completely wrong.

which doctor
16th January 2006, 23:12
Originally posted by redstar2000+Jan 16 2006, 08:51 AM--> (redstar2000 @ Jan 16 2006, 08:51 AM)
Fist of Blood
I had to write this essay for religion class.

What's depleted uranium got to do with religion?

What you need to do is write essays attacking superstition.

For example, the anti-Chavez campaign of the Catholic Church in Venezuela.

Don't let those bastards "off the hook".

Give them hell! :angry:

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It has to do with morality and whether it is ok to do bad to achieve good or some something like that. Today we were talking about why we should love christ and I asked the teacher why starving kids in africa should love christ because they have nothing to be thankful for. He gave some bullshit answer. I always write my papers for that class with an anti-government and agnostic approach. I hate that class. Sometimes I just skip it all together and head up to art class.

Don't worry, I do give him hell pretty often.