Song I wrote today

[The Sloth]

Hmmmm, check it...



Let us come together this day,
Give praise to our God,
Give praise to the Lord,
We kneel for glory in His name
Victory, we are all together in front
of the gates of Heaven, tonight!"

I REMEMBER....the days when I used to catch the Holy Ghost in church,
in His court, same time that my heart was hurt, so I
Turned to the Lord just to read the Word
Inducted to the cult, in the hopes...
To search for the meaning, right behind my being,
But praying to a cree-cha... that never existed,
Jeeee-sus! No wonder that he never listened!
So instead of, staying down on my knees
Kneeling... to a myth as a slave to superstition,
I think I'd rather stand on my own two feet,
Stumblin' over sins and trippin',
But nonetheless, don't think that I'm losing faith
'Cause how can you lose a thang,
That never was in the first place?
Hmmmm...
But let's listen to the preacher, and hope with
Our brothers that he falls off the fucking pulpit:

"In the name of the Lord,
We pray on our knees and kiss the cross,
Because God loved the world so,
That he gave his own begotten son to die,
Like a thief on a crucifix,
With blood and water from the side,
Ordered by the Jews to be executed!"

Check the facts, 'cause I don't think...
That Jesus Christ was the first to have twelve disciples
"Though shalt not kill", but even God is homocidal
Planning out a genocide campaign against all non-believers,
And if a heathen ain't suffered enough, then...
In the depths of hell is where he hopes to leave ya
But tell me teacher,
Why do I see fifty references to Jesus,
But not a single to Horus of Egypt?

"Horus of Egypt?"

OK, check it,
A few hundred years before the Christ, in myth
Horus was born to the virgin Isis on December 25th
Baptized when he was thirty, and walked on water
So is Christianity unique....well, sort of???
Crucified, buried in a tomb and resurrected
Three days later, Horus, into heaven he ascended
Known as the "savior", "son of man" and the "Messiah"
It seems as if Jesus Christ was not the first to take the title
So, I don't want none of your rules and morals,
I'd rather live my life despite in the way that I was brought up
"Sin" is an invention, "religion" is a myth
And if you think otherwise, then prove it!
But the preacher is speaking, so shut up and listen
Let's absorb his words, his infinite wisdom:

"In the name of God,
We are damning the Muslims,
The Jews and the Pagans,
And throwing fire at their heads,
Opening heaven to the Christians,
And only to those that believe in the power of the Lord,
We are one step away from the Promised Land,
And brick by brick the Lord is making his fortress,
For when Armageddon comes,
Corruption will come to its end,
Take my hand, and let's build the Utopia
On earth, as it is in heaven!
Amen!"

Shit, if that's your God, then let me be honest
There's no fucking way I wanna be made "in his likeness"
And those "Christian" males that condemn homosexuality,
Probably spent a few nights jerkin' to lesbian pornogaphy
And those fools that talking about "morals" and "values"
Probably keeping fifteen skeletons in the closet,
Talking about, "homosexuality is a sin according to Leviticus"
But forgetting the part where it says to stone your wife if she adulterous
So, tell me, are you keeping the Book underneath ya shirt, so ardent?
Alright, then how about throwing out the condom out ya back pocket?
So, tell me, are you keeping your prayers for heaven?
Then why, when you finish, do you get back to swearing?
Hypocrite, "common sense" tellin' me I'm fillin' out ya death ceritificate
When you're talking about, "praise the Lord",
and "mackin' ho's"
In the same sentences!
But hey, I'm just a fool, so all y'all don't even have to listen
Instead, let's pay attention to the preacher working wonders for the Christians:

"Hallelujah, I say unto thee,
Soon, we'll be free from this world of sin,
This melange of heathen fucktards,
These cock-sucking faggots that'll burn in hell,
Feeling God's wrath on their backs,
While I'm receiving oral sex from the choir girls
Heterosexuality is convenient, so I'll follow
But in the meantime, remember:
God loves thee,
For he has prepared a lake of fire for most of y'all
Praise be to the Lord,
For we see in a foggy mirror now, dimly
But it will be clear when we stand in front of the pearly gates,
Being welcomed into the new world
With Christian coke-heads, alcoholics
Murderers,
Rapists,
Thieves,
That, in the last minute of life,
Accepted Christ and received no penalty!
On Earth, as it is in heaven,
Amen!"

[Hate Is Art]

It's long, and religious, not my cup-o-tea champ.

[Subversive Pessimist]

You are very good at writing. You've got potential. You are very talented. Clever and sophisticated humor.
However, as DN said; It's religious. Not my cup-o-tea.

[The Sloth]

Hmmmm, how is it religious? I was thinking more like sacrilegious and blasphemous, considering how I'm attacking religion in general.

[Subversive Pessimist]

Actually, after reading it a couple of times, I take it back. I think it's great.

However, I think you should sacrifice a little more of the facts to a little more lyrical thing... God, I'm tired, don't know how to articulate myself...


I think you are good at combining poetry with lyrics, but you should have a general pattern in the song. Also, I think you need rhythm and rhyme. When you make it rhyme, you make it very good.

Like here:

Jeeee-sus! No wonder that he never listened!
So instead of, staying down on my knees
Kneeling... to a myth as a slave to superstition,


Marilyn Manson is great at rythm:

I'm not a slave
To a God
That doesn't exist

I'm not a slave
To a (don't remember what it was)
That don't give a shit

If you have the flow with you, it doesn't matter as much on what you say, as long as it sounds good. Take RATM for example. Their lyrics sucks, but their music is great. Not many people care that much about the text, just as long as the music is good.

[robob8706]

[QUOTE]And those "Christian" males that condemn homosexuality,
Probably spent a few nights jerkin' to lesbian pornogaphy

HAHAHAH GENIUS!