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Paul Pott
1st July 2013, 05:13
I want to see if Revleft can alter the moral of this classic fable by changing one word or other detail at a time. The rules are, at the end it still has to be about a dog who has a bell, and no super silly things.


There was a dog who used to sneak up and bite people. His master forged a bell for the dog and tied it onto him so that everyone would know when he was coming. The dog then paraded about the marketplace, shaking his bell back and forth. An old dog said to him, 'You wretched creature! Why are you so proud of yourself? This is not a decoration for bravery or good behaviour. You are shamefully beating the drum of your own evil deeds!'

BIXX
1st July 2013, 07:20
There was a dog who used to sneak up and bite people. His master forged a bell for the dog and tied it onto him so that everyone would know when he was coming. The dog then paraded about the marketplace, shaking his bell back and forth. An old dog said to him, 'You amazing creature! Why are you so proud of yourself? This is not a decoration for bravery or good behaviour. You are shamefully beating the drum of your own evil deeds!'


Bolded to draw attention.

Flying Purple People Eater
1st July 2013, 07:26
The dog laughed and devoured the man with his titanium-alloy ant-mandibles.

Also doesn't 'My challenge' translate into 'Mein Kampf'?

Kalinin's Facial Hair
1st July 2013, 15:11
Maybe "My Struggle" would fit better?

Paul Pott
1st July 2013, 15:28
Yes, it's an anti-Semitic conspiracy.

I think ant mandibles would fall under silly, so... Also, at the end it has to be a coherent story.