My second song

[Dirty Commie]

We live in a nation where
kids worship a corporate label
nike reebok gap doesn't matter
children can't can't read
but know who married J-Lo

The more you buy you are, the more friends you get
If you think for yourself you an outcast
Our youths only media outlet
is the shit they get from mtv's cast

Society has done it,
kids don't care anymore
they believe what they're told
to buy what's being sold

Starfucks enslaves Columbian peasants
the Gap does it too
27 million human beings
held in bondage
the land of the free has one in four

I need some more. any help appreciated.

[Dirty Commie]

Title of this one is Hot Profit

[Goldfinger]

Unless you post an MP3, that's litterature, not music.

[bush youth]

good job. It's hard to tell without the music, but based on the lyrics, it sounds good. It kind of reminds me of this (http://starbuckscocacolagap.com).. kinda.
I think you should end it with revolution in mind :rolleyes: possibly make it more hopeful
it's your song, do whatever you feel like.